帮我修改一下英语作文吧，麻烦了
It absolutely changed a lot this year that my life became much different. When I was in junior 2, I used to have so much free time that I was able to do whatever I wanted. Now I am junior 3, I almost can’t play anymore because of the big pressure from parents and teachers. I also had less homework before. Instead, there’s plenty of homework to do everyday and I don’t go to bed until 11:00 p.m. It causes that I nearly fall asleep in class the next day. I am not allowed to go to movies either, my mom told me it’s extremely necessary to concentrate on study, only study! I have no chance to think about something entertaining! How disgusting! It’s impossible for me to live normally under such a terrible condition, and then I communicated with Ms. Lee, my English teacher. She’s patient and said that this year is crucial for us in order to make life easier. Later I realized the importance and I am much optimistic now. She’s right; the boring score will decide which high school you should study in. What’s more, perhaps it will determine your job and your lifetime. In a word, there’s an old saying that “No pains, no gains”, I am going to study hard and I believe I will control my future.
Tom
更改语句：She’s right, the boring score will decide which high school you should study in.
应改为：She’s right; the boring score will decide which high school you should study in.
更改语句：She' wrote up the idea , then she got a patent
应改为：She' wrote up the idea ,and then she got a patent
Dear Paul,
It absolutely changed a lot this year, whilst my life became much different. When I was in my junior year, I used to have so much free time that I was able to do whatever I wanted. Now I am my senior, I almost can’t play anymore because of the huge pressure from my parents and teachers. Before, I did not have a lot of homework. Now there is a tremendous amount of homework to do everyday and I don’t go to bed until 11:00 p.m. It made me nearly fall asleep in class the next day. I am not allowed to go to movies either, because my mom told me it’s extremely necessary to concentrate on study, only study! I don't even have a chance to think about something entertaining! How awful! It’s impossible for me to live normally under such a terrible condition, and then I communicated with Ms. Lee, my English teacher. She was patient and said that this year is crucial for us in order to make life easier for later on. Later I realized the importance and I am much more optimistic now. She’s right, the one score will decide which high school you should study in. What’s more, perhaps it will determine your job and your lifetime. In a sentence, there’s an old saying that “No pains, no gains”, I am going to study hard and I believe I will control my future.
Tom
注意语法与用词，还有持续食用过去式
Dear Paul,
It absolutely changed a lot this year that my life became much different. When I was in junior 2, I used to have so much free time that I was able to do whatever I wanted. Now I am junior 3, I almost can’t play anymore because of the big pressure from parents and teachers. I also had less homework before. Instead, there’s plenty of homework to do everyday and I don’t go to bed until 11:00 p.m. It causes that I nearly fall asleep in class the next day. I am not allowed to go to movies either, my mom told me it’s extremely necessary to concentrate on study, only study! I have no chance to think about something entertaining! How disgusting! It’s impossible for me to live normally under such a terrible condition, and then I communicated with Ms. Lee, my English teacher. She’s patient and said that this year is crucial for us in order to make life easier. Later I realized the importance and I am much optimistic now. She’s right, the boring score will decide which high school you should study in. What’s more, perhaps it will determine your job and your lifetime. In a word, there’s an old saying that “No pains, no gains”, I am going to study hard and I believe I will control my future.
T T刺激谁玩儿啊
修改一下英语作文~
才看到楼主的话，既然这样说，我又做了许多修改，添加了一些高级句型，在文章中以数字一一说明。
总体来说这篇读后感写的很好，只有一些小问题，多属于时态方面和细节方面的。我稍微做了一些修改和润色。
一楼说的也很好，但是楼主只让修改这篇文章的语病，我就这样做了，如果有问题，还可私聊。
My favourite great book is Three Days to See written by Helen Keller. This book impressed me（1）. It told me how lucky we are. Helen had a serious illness when she was nineteen months. Although she survived from the illness, she was unable to see and hear. She was in a fret at the beginning. But with the help of Sullivan , she surmounted the difficulties .At last, she became a successful person（2）.
My favourite scene in the book is when Helen imagined three days to see（3）. She said “Oh, how many things I can see if I had the power of sight for just three days!”we can see, how precious it was for Helen Keller （4）. But （5）, I think that people can realize the importance of the sight and sound only after they have personally expericenced the dark and silence life（6）.
Helen is the hero of the story, but there are （7）other important characters. Sullivan is a patient teacher （8）and she gave her love to Helen（9）, she let Helen have confidence and help her get out of darkness days（10）.
The themes of the book are to do with persistence and life（11）. It describes how Helen spent the dark and silence life（12）. Finally, it talks about the meaning of life and how to spend our life meaningful（13）.
1 impressed me后面加上a lot，更好，还有时态有点问题，改为一般现在时。
2 became a successful person后面加上who was worth others' respect，值得别人的尊敬。
3 imagined three days to see后面改为imagined that she had three days to see
4 这里最好补充说明一下为什么很珍贵，我加上了if she realized that dream如果她实现了那个梦想
5 这里没有转折关系，改为After finishing reading this book，读完这本书后
6 the dark and silence life改为the darkness and silence of life生命中的黑暗和寂静
7 other改为some other一些其它的
8 Sullivan is a patient teacher 改为Sullivan was a patient teacher ，时态问题
9 she gave her love to Helen改为she lavished affection on Helen，她对海伦倾注了所有的爱
10 and help her get out of darkness days.改为and helped her get out of dark days.
11这句话略显平淡，我改成A theme of persistence and life is proposed in this boook.这本书揭示了恒心和人生的主题。
12the dark and silence life改为the dark and silent life，这样不与上文重复
13最后一句是收尾，需是点睛之笔，我改成I appreciate Hellen Keller. Her life is a miracle, she stronly face the difficulties which can detroy one’s mind of living. Her life is a tragedy, but the world in her heart is full of love. Her spirit will encourage all of us, forever.
改过的文章如下：
My favourite great book is Three Days to See written by Helen Keller. This book impresses me a lot. It tells me how lucky we are. Helen had a serious illness when she was nineteen months. Although she survived from the illness, she was unable to see and hear. She was in a fret at the beginning. But with the help of Sullivan , she surmounted the difficulties .At last, she became a successful person who was worth others' respect.
My favourite scene in the book is when Helen imagined that she had three days to see. She said “Oh, how many things I can see if I had the power of sight for just three days!”we can see, how precious it was for Helen Keller if she realized that dream. After finishing reading this book, I think that people can realize the importance of the sight and sound only after they have personally expericenced the darkness and silence of life.
Helen is the hero of the story, but there are some other important characters. Sullivan was a patient teacher and she lavished affection on Helen, and she let Helen have confidence and helped her get out of dark days.
A theme of persistence and life is proposed in this boook. It describes how Helen spent the dark and silent life. I appreciate Hellen Keller. Her life is a miracle, she stronly face the difficulties which can detroy one’s mind of living. Her life is a tragedy, but the world in her heart is full of love. Her spirit will encourage all of us forever.
祝楼主进步！
要是答案还满意的话，记得采纳哦，O(∩_∩)O谢谢~！
嗯，介个。。。错的地方还蛮多的耶。。。
嗯，还有你是准备给外国人看的还是给中国人看的，写的方法是不一样的。还有，你多大了？这是神马程度的作文？小学？初中？高中？还是大学的？我先改改语法，如果你想我帮你再改用词或者内容神马的，找我。
还有，我猜想你想说的是书写，而不是写作吧。。。那就不是writing，是handwriting.
nowadays, handwriting is very important. As a student, we always need handwriting. However, someone's is good, while others are just ordinary.
Some adults always say, handwriting tells a man. When you are reading, you can know the author is tall or short, fat or thin, or even bad temper or good temper, etc. Although I do not think what the adults said is totally right, some of their arguments are reasonable. Because I always have this feeling, if someone's writing is neat, the person, in fact, is very scrupulous and his temper is good. However, if he writes carelessly,(绝对不是casually), I may think he is lazy. (后面那句不要了，没意义。) But,(后面加上你觉得大人们说得不全对的原因。)
Therefore, (最后一句和前面的论点矛盾了，我先给你改语法，内容你需要我就给你改。) if you always pay attention to other's handwriting, you can know what the person is like. In other words, handwriting tells a man.
我不知道你学了英语多久，语法和内容都很有问题唉，多看看范文吧孩子~~
有问题找我。
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